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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
THE TABLE
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COMPARES
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 THE UNDERGROUND RAILWAY SYSTEMS.
OVERALL
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, IT IS
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NOTICEABLE
NOTICABLE
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NOTICEABLE
 TOKYO HAS THE MOST

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inaugurated
  • passenger throughput
  • network extensiveness
  • utilization rate
  • infrastructure
  • capacity
  • comparative analysis
  • disparity
  • ridership
  • underutilized
  • commuter density
  • historical significance
  • relatively recent
  • well-established
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