The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .
The
line
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graph
illustrate
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the changes between the years from 2011 to 2018. Which tells the percentage of the number of shops newly open and
shopes
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shoppes
shops
which shut down in that period of time
Overall
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,
according to
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the provided data, it can be
observerd
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observed
that there are
noticable
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noticeable
notable
changes over the year in
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a unit
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unit
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of
shopes
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shoppes
shops
.
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, it indicates that there is
gradual
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a gradual
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decrease in opening new shopes. Respectively,
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a slightly
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slightly
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decline is
also
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observed in
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the closures
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closures
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line
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. To start with, In 2011, a huge
dropped
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can be seen in
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the openning
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openning
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opening
which
pump
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down from below 9000 to 4000.
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again it slightly
increase
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and hit
second
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its second
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highest peak little above
from
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6000,
ater
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after
that
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end up
with
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it's
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lowest point 3000.
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,
closures
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the closures
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line
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graph
also
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behave
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kind of same
starts
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starting
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from below 7000 and once it meets with the
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opening
openning
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opening
line
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at slightly above 6000, from there sharpest decrease faces to under 1000,
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to
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,
in
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behave
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inversly
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inversely
and
stop
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at its final peak lesser up 5000

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words line with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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