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Band 3

Many people say that human society has developed into a “throw-away” society, which is filled with plastic bags and rubbish. What are the causes and solutions?

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Introduction
In
todays
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today's
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 era, Humans are using
plastic
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 everywhere possible in our daily
life
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lives
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.Every place
using
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uses
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plastic
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nowdays
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nowadays
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 including packaging.We have to donate something to our environment by reducing
plastic
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 cups and packaging.In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 we should stop using
plastic
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cutlary
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cutlery
 and bags and we can look towards
paper
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 cups and
recycalable
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recyclable
paper
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 material.
Body paragraph 1
firstly
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, If we can focus on
causes
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the causes
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 of
plastic
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use
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, because of our fast life and busy schedule we are often using
fiber
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fibre
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 cups and other non
recycleble
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recyclable
product
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products
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.It
is
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apply
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directly or indirectly
damage
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damages
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 our
enviornment
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environment
.people
nowdays
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nowadays
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 like to
use
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 throw-away products when they travelling.
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,we
was
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were
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 travelling to
bannf
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banner
 century par and we carried away
plastic
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cup
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cups
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 and dishes
that
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is
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are
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 easy to throw away.
Body paragraph 2
Secoundly
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Secondly
, If we are looking
on
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for
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solution
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the solution
a solution
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of avoiding
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to avoid
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plastic
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use
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 we can take
reuseble
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reusable
reuseable
 plates and mugs with us but we have to wash
it
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them
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 after
use
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.AS
human
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humans
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 we have to do our job hard as we have to clean after
use
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.
Onother
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Another
On other
 option we have we can
use
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paper
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 material for carrying away that can be less harmful
for
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to
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climate
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the climate
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.
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, some
supermarket
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supermarkets
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 are giving
paper
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carrybag
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carry bag
now days
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nowadays
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 to avoid polythene bags.
Conclusion
We can say that, with
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use
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the use
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 of steel or clay material as
carrying
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a carrying
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 option we can serve our planet
little
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a little
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batter
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better
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 and reduce pollution by stopping
plastic
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 manufacturing.

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task achievement
Make sure to start with a clear introduction that outlines the problem and your solutions.
coherence and cohesion
Use paragraphs clearly to separate different points. This helps the reader understand your ideas better.
task achievement
Give specific examples for your points to strengthen your argument. For instance, mention details about the paper bags or reusable items you suggest.
task achievement
You clearly identified the topic and discussed both causes and solutions of plastic use.
task achievement
Your points about reusable items and paper bags show good understanding of the issue.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • throw-away society
  • plastic bags and rubbish
  • consumerism
  • materialistic culture
  • lack of awareness
  • recycling
  • waste management
  • insufficient regulations
  • product packaging
  • waste disposal
  • sustainable
  • eco-friendly
  • lifestyles
  • raising awareness
  • waste reduction
  • stricter regulations
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