Some people say that it is possible for a county to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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of people argue that
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a nation
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cannot maintain
economy
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economic
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growth and and sustain
environment
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the environment
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simaltaneously
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simultaneously
.
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,others contend with
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statement.
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my perspective,I believe that
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the govermnment
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govermnment
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government
can do both by taking
necessary
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the necessary
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steps. On the one hand,critics said that harm to
environment
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the environment
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is
prerequisite
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a prerequisite
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for the country's economic success.
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,
large
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a large
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area is needed to construct
building
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buildings
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, which
result
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results
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in
depletion
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the depletion
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of natural resources.
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,
industralization
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industrialization
industrialisation
and transportation
system
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systems
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result in increased consumption of natural resources and pollution respectively.
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,proponents posit that thriving and maintenance of
economic
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economics
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and infrastructure is compatible with
perserving
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preserving
natural habitats and the environment.
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,
instead
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of producing automobiles running on petrol develop that which runs on electricity
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produced
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from renewable resources which
increase
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increases
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efficiency
while
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not affecting our surroundings. In conclusion,
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economic development's side effects on the
enviroment
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environment
are undeniable
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from
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some perspectives,
however
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,I believe players in
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game can play their roles by doing some
beneficaial
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beneficial
acts.

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Make sure to use clear and complete sentences. Some sentences are incomplete or have errors.
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Organize your ideas clearly. Make sure each paragraph has a main idea and supporting details.
coherence and cohesion
Use transition words to connect your ideas. This helps the reader to follow your argument better.
task achievement
You raised important points about the relationship between economy and environment.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction gives a clear view of your opinion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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