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Band 3.5

Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 of people argue that a nation cannot maintain economic growth and and sustain the
environment
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 simultaneously.
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,others contend with
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 statement.From my perspective,l believe that
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the government
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 can do both by taking the necessary steps. On the one hand, critics said that harm to the
environment
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 is a prerequisite for the country's economic success.
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,a large area is needed to construct buildings, which results in the depletion of natural resources.
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, industrialization and transportation systems result in increased consumption of natural resources and pollution respectively.
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, proponents posit that
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the thriving
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 and maintenance of economics and infrastructure is compatible with preserving natural habitats and the
environment
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.
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instead
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 of producing automobiles running on petrol develop that which runs on electricity produced from renewable resources which increases efficiency
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 not affecting our surroundings. In conclusion,
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 economic development's side effects on the
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 are undeniable from some perspectives,
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,l believe players in
this
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 game can play their roles by doing some beneficial acts.

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Make sure to clearly outline your main points in the introduction.
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Expand on your examples to provide more details and support your points.
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Try to balance the two sides of the argument more equally in terms of space and detail.
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You presented a clear opinion on the topic, showing your stance.
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The examples you used, such as electric cars, were relevant and helpful in supporting your arguments.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • environmental sustainability
  • policies
  • technology
  • commitment
  • green technology
  • renewable energy sources
  • carbon emissions
  • pollution
  • industrial development
  • production
  • consumption
  • depletion of natural resources
  • loss of biodiversity
  • unsustainable
  • consumption patterns
  • sustainable development
  • technological innovation
  • global cooperation
  • circular economy
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