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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The pie charts
depicts
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depict
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 information about the
numbers
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number
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 of visitors to Ashdown Museum with
outcome
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the outcome
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 of
survey
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the survey
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 on their satisfaction level during
visit
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visits
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 the year before and after the
refurbishment
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 of
Museum
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the Museum
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. After analyzing the bar charts, it can be seen clearly that, a major
diffrence
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difference
 was
seeen
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seen
sen
 in dissatisfied
vistors
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visitors
, 40
percent
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per cent
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 in
year
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the year
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 before
refurbishment
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 it decreased by 25
percent
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per cent
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 after
refurbishment
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.
In contrast
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, the
numbers
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number
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 of very satisfied people was 15
percent
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per cent
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while
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 it increased twofold after
refurbishment
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words refurbishment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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