You have noticed a problem with the heating system in your rented apartment. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: Describe the problem Say how it is affecting your daily life Ask for it to be fixed as soon as possible

Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my concern about the problems related to the heating system of my apartment. As you are already aware, there is winter season going on and
apartment's
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the apartment's
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heating system is not working effectively. The one major issue is
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that, heating
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heating
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the heating
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system gets tripped after bringing the room temperature to 2 or 3 degrees, which is still
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as cold
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as
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the living room. It affects my daily life too in many ways. At
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not able to take an adequate amount of rest as required by my body after the hectic work schedule
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the cold inside the house.
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, I could not take a bath in the early mornings before going to work sometimes which affects my profile as a valuable employee of the company. I request that you, have a closer look at
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issue and get it fixed as soon as possible. Sincerely, Mohit

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Add more details about how the cold affects your daily life for a complete response.
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Your letter has a polite tone and appropriate greeting and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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