Nowadays people use bicycles less as a form of transport. Why is that? What we can do to encourage people to use bicycles more?

Bicycles require human
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power which is considered
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eco-friendly and useful tool for everyone who prefers to keep fit.
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, the
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rate is measured to be the lowest
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to other
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users raising a big question. As far as I am concerned, there are main reasons
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people’s attention with relevant strategies to tackle
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situation.
First,
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it is apparent that bicycles are not born to meet people’s demand
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both speed and convenience, especially for severe
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or long
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.
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, bikes aren’t as fast as other motor vehicles
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as motorbikes,
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,.. to properly function
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such
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a long time.
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it offers a great deal of cyclist’s strength to make it operate that obviously nobody can make it.
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, in
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aspect, box-shaped transports have a canopy and surrounding protective layers to hold up any direct accidents or bad weather. A second apparent cause is the shortage of cycling infrastructure that can not
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residents’ need for safety. In many big cities, a few bicycle
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or distinctive
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for
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is designated
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often
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people’s lives as the principal
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. A number of methods are suggested to cope with the problem.
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with, organizations or individuals have managed to launch awareness campaigns as the best strategies to convey a message about cycling advantages. During the gathering, organizers are able to
cycling
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benefits including health, environmental and
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aspects through many educational
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activities;
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to encourage
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the regular usage of
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bicycles
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for short to medium distances.
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,
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should give a hand to handle the situation as financial supporters. It means
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they have an obligation to invest more in better cycling infrastructure
as well as
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building more bike lanes, installing traffic signals and creating exclusive
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to provide with safer environment for cyclists.
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, these methods help
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public order, security and healthy
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in the region. In conclusion,many main contributors to the significant decrease are mentioned, but
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there are feasible solutions to tackle
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them. Thanks to the support from beneficial campaigns and
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, people now can widely acknowledge bicycle’s merits;
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having no more hesitation in
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on the road.

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Use simpler and clearer sentences to explain your ideas better.
task achievement
You discuss the reasons for less bicycle use clearly.
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You suggest ways to encourage bicycle use, which is relevant and valuable.

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