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Here, With the advancement of technology, social interaction among people has affected to a greater extent. What are the reasons of reduced social interaction? Suggest whether this would lead to a positive or negative effect in the future.

The internet has grown fast in
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recent decades,you can notice the consequences of the internet in each part of your daily routine. We need the internet
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perpetually
perpetual
 to do our duties readily and smoothly,
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furthermore
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 it
became
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 an important part of our life,and without
it
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 nothing could function clearly or even better. The development of technology affected the
interact
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 among people
in
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defferent
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different
 ages
especially
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the
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teenagers,most of them
had became
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 introverts,
they
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and they
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 prefer spending their
times
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 lonely just with their phones
instead
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 of interacting with people,including their family
also
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.
This
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 could be an
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incredible
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leads
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 to massive issues. We have to reduce the
consumtion
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consumption
 of technology
,
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and make
ourself
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ourselves
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 more able to handle
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these problems. Whether
echnology
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technology
 has a lot of benefits and helps more than a million people worldwide,
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effect
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 our future and makes us more
relyable
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reliable
 on it to do our exercises and projects,
on the other
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hand
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 it could lead the world to be a small
erea
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area
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coherence and cohesion
Start with a clear introduction that states the main idea of your essay. At the end, summarize your points briefly in a conclusion.
task achievement
Use clearer examples to support your ideas. For instance, mention specific ways technology affects social interactions.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to organize your ideas better. Each paragraph should focus on one main point with clear connection to others.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to spelling and grammar. Words like 'incredible' and 'reliable' are misspelled, which can affect understanding.
task achievement
You identified the main issue of reduced social interaction due to technology, which is relevant to the topic.
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You acknowledged both the positive and negative impacts of technology, which adds depth to your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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