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Band 4.5

You are preparing an event in the countryside. Write a letter to your friend and ask for help with the arrangements. What the event is. Why the event is being held? What arrangements have already been made? How your friend can help?

Dear Sam , I hope you are in
a
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radiant
of
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health and good spirits. I am writing
this
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 letter to seek your assistance for the holy celebration which will held on Saturday at
countryside
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the countryside
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 hall and the address is 1456
sunrise road
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Sunrise Road
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. Holy is an imperative festival
and
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celebrated every year in the month of March which brings happiness and excitement
in
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 our lives . Like
a
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last
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 year we will organise
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 program with
an
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enthusiasm
for
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this
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 I need your help. All arrangements have been in
progess
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progress
 since
on
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last
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 week which includes food , drinks , colour and placement of the chairs. The
diaster
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disaster
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 happened when the decorator ditched us at the
last
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 moment ,
hence
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 I want your help
to decor
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decorating
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 the hall , as you are
expert
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an expert
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 in
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 field . We have decided to
decorator
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 the place with red roses and Lilly flowers and
red
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a red
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 carpet will be placed at the main entrance . You live in the city ,
thus
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 it will be easy for you to buy all the items without any inconvenience . I hope to see you soon . Yours truly , Sam

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use clear and simple sentences. This helps the reader understand your message better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use proper paragraphs for different ideas. Each paragraph should have one main idea to improve clarity.
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Check your grammar and spelling. Correcting these will make your letter look more polished.
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Make sure you clearly state what you need from your friend earlier in the letter. This helps to set the main purpose clearly.
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You included the details about the event, which gives context to your friend.
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Your tone is friendly, which is good for a letter to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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