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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
The charts illustrate the percentages of marriages and divorces in the USA from 1970 to 2000, and the marital status of American
adults
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 in 1970 and 2000.
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, the majority of
adults
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 in both years were married,
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 smaller proportions were divorced, widowed, or had never been married. In 1970, around 70% of American
adults
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 were married, but
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 figure declined to 60% by 2000.
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, the percentage of
adults
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 who had never been married rose from just over 10% in 1970 to 20% in 2000.
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 indicates a shift away from marriage over the 30-year period. Regarding other marital statuses, the proportion of divorced
adults
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 increased slightly, from under 10% in 1970 to around 10% in 2000.
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, the percentage of widowed individuals remained relatively stable at just under 10% in both years.
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, marriage remained the dominant status, but trends showed increasing diversity in marital situations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adults with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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