The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The bar graph illustrates the allocation of income by five nations in food, housing, transportation, health care and clothing during the year 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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maximum
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the maximum
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proportion of income is utilised for
accomodation
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accommodation
by all the nations
whereas
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minimum
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the minimum
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expenditure is done on health care and shopping
clothes
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for clothes
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. In terms of diet,
United
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the United
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states
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States
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and
Canada
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spent around 15%
while
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United
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the United
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Kingdom and Japan drained 20% and 23% of their total income, respectively.
However
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, the trend reversed simultaneously, resulting in spending more than 20% of the savings on houses,
by
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in
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all the countries. People from
Canada
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inculcated maximum expenditure on transportation in comparison
other
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to other
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territories. Meanwhile, residents of America utilised more than 5% of their earnings on
mainting
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maintaining
their health
whereas
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the percentage of expenses on
heath
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health
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care
by
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in
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Canada
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and Japan was similar. In
context
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the context
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of buying
attires
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attire
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,
Canada
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occupied
first
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the first
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position in spending money on buying clothes, accounting for approximately 7%.
In contrast
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,
United
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the United
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Kingdom invested 5% and the proportion of expenditure on clothes by Japan and
United
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the United
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States was even less than 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words canada with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • expenditures
  • categories
  • United States
  • Canada
  • United Kingdom
  • Japan
  • 2009
  • spending habits
  • housing
  • transportation
  • food
  • healthcare
  • highest
  • lowest
  • comparison
  • overview
  • significant
  • differences
  • similarities
  • trends
  • summary
  • analysis
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