Some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive or negative development?

The restriction of using mobile
phones
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at
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is commonly found.
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, some other
schools
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have allowed
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students
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for using
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phones
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.
This
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phenomenon has some negative impacts,
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as limiting the additional
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and taking longer time to capture the slides.
Firstly
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, mobile
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restriction
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at some
schools
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might limit
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students
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students'
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source
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sources
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of learning
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.
This
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is because
student
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the student
a student
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cannot surf the internet via their mobile
phones
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if they need more explanation or more
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examples
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of the
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.
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, in Jakarta, there is a secondary school which
allowed
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allows
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phone
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usage in the class to assist them
by
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with
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the internet source of
material
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the material
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.
Then
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, the
students
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have a responsibility to discuss
their
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additional knowledge they gained from the internet with the class.
Consequently
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, they tend to be more engaged with the modules because they gain more knowledge from the mobile
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than the teacher had been prepared.
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, mobile
phone
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limitation
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limitations
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have
a
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potential to take more time
for capturing
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to capture
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the class
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because
students
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have to write
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notes
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. The reason is,
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students
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that students
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can capture the slides or whiteboard with their mobile
phones
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more quickly. Writing the
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on our own
notes
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, from one whiteboard, takes around five minutes.
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, taking a picture of the
materials
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need
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takes
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less than three seconds, which is 100 times more effective than writing the
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.
As a result
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,
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to taking
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with
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handwriting
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, mobile
phone
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captures the
materials
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easier and faster. In conclusion, the statement regarding the restriction of
phone
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usages
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usage
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in some
schools
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is a negative development.
This
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is caused by
students
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will limit
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limiting
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their source of additional
materials
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and taking
notes
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inefficiently.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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