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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people think that an international car free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think that there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

There are several ways to reduce air pollution. People are mostly using awareness
programe
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programmes
 about how to arrange good things to have
better
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a better
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 environment. First and
formost
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foremost
,
human
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humans
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 need to be more
knowlagable
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knowledgeable
knowledgable
 about
avoid
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the
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pollution. For
this
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 situation,
human
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humans
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 need to identify better transportation
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system
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 to overcome by using less
poluting
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polluting
 fuel.
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government
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 has to arrange their
transporting
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system
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accuratly
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accurately
as well as
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using
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 less carbon fuel.
Secondly
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, they have to
be
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pracrically
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practically
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best
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 possible ways to reduce
these bad quality environment behavior
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.
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, many people think there are many possible ways to reduce
this
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 pollution. On the one
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govenment
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government
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introduced
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fine
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system
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 for the using many vehicles in a single family.
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traffic
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the traffic
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 department has to
be use
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point
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system
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 for electric cars and gas vehicles. In
conclution
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conclusion
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by
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several
environement
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environment
environmental
 controls has to be
impliment
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implement
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betterthan
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better than
conduct
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conducting
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 one international motor fair. It is
more
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a more
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 effective way to overcome
this
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 situation.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion. This will help the reader understand your main point better.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear and connected sentences to improve flow. Try to use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', 'however', and 'for example' to connect your ideas.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and explanations for your points. This will help to support your arguments and make them more convincing.
task achievement
You show an understanding of different methods to reduce pollution, which is good.
task achievement
The essay discusses both sides of the argument briefly, which is an important part of the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international
  • car free day
  • reduce
  • air pollution
  • effective
  • ways
  • people
  • public transport
  • awareness
  • traffic
  • city
  • quality
  • break
  • cycle
  • pleasant
  • habits
  • environment
  • health
  • climate change
  • energy
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