With the increased global demand for oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

Since airports were built and airlines created,
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easier, faster, more comfortable and cheaper in some ways, which means tourism
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has rocketed.
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if it's cheaper for us, does
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’ good for everyone else around us? Our knowledge about problems caused by our travelling is very little. As an example, we don’t think about the fact that airports need a lot of space, far from the city, and that spaces are being taken from wildlife. Another big problem is CO2
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effect , big weather changes and events
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as tornadoes, floods, heatwaves etc.
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global emission of CO2 is about 5 - 6%, doesn't seem so bad, right? But if I told you that
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small percentage of pollution causes about 150 thousand deaths per year, wildlife not included, does
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change your mind? Do not forget, we can always do something about it. For starters, airlines offer people to pay for the
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used for their flights.
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money would be used for making new, better air technologies,
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example new Boeing 737 would accommodate more people, which would calculate
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less fuel usage per flight. Since the creation of
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by planes fuel making has come a long way and bio-fuel was invented. But the problem is that not all planes can be
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by it. The conclusion of
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by plane has its downsides,
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it has made its way for the better,
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it doesn't mean that it’s the best way, there’s always another choice.
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caused by flight aren't that big, but it has a lot of impact on our wildlife and nature. You can help it, by donating some money for your flight’s
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and maybe,
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about
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more
eco - friendly
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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion. Use a clear thesis statement to guide the reader.
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More specific examples related to wildlife and CO2 effects can strengthen your points.
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You raised important points about the dangers of CO2 emissions and their effects on wildlife.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion nicely summed up your main thoughts and gave a strong final statement.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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