The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided diagram outlines the steps
involve
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in the life cycle of the
honey
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bee
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. To initiate, after every three
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days
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days,
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female
honey
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bees lay 1 or 2
eggs
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. Interestingly, these
eggs
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hatched after 9 - 10
days
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. When
eggs
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are hatched, just
after
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this
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, in five
days
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a tiny
honey
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bee
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breaks the egg and
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his face.
Subsequently
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, after two
days
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,
this
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small
honey
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bee
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turned into a small young
bee
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with
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a little bigger in size.
In contrast
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,
following
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this
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,
same
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the same
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honey
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be
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apply
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just in total 9
days
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,
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after it hatched,
become
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becomes
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an adult, and
this
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time it becomes large in size.
Likewise
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, after some
days
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,
this
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honey
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bee
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grows 3 times more, and
then
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it
reached
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reaches
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to young adult.
Finally
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, within 34-36
days
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honey
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bees
reached
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reach
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to
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the
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apply
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maturity, at that time, they
become
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became
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more
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apply
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bigger in
sizes
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size
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and more strong.
Overall
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, the provided process chart can be categorised into four principal stages, commencing with the given of
eggs
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by
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honey
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a honey
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bee
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, proceeding to the hatching stage, and
this
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process concludes after 34-36
days
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,
and
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apply
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in
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apply
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these
days
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honey
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bee
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reaches
to
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apply
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its maturity.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words honey, bee, days, eggs with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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