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Many people use written language in a less formal and more relaxed way. Why? Does this development have advantages and disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 it has become an undeniable trend how individuals
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switched
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way
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 of communicating, specifically in
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 method. There are some core reasons for
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 change
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 its benefits and drawbacks in some areas.
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 semi-formal communication
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system
. With any
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 a majority of
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the generation
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 would prefer to live
in
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a more convenient life, which has become average thanks to technological amenities. To be more
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precise
, people are used to
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 with daily tasks with a quick click, to say with their gadgets and modern devices. They are no longer willing to do tasks which require them to think
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thoroughly
. The same goes with their manner of communication. As long as formal writings are distinct from their usual speech, which makes them think carefully in terms of correct expressions and words rather than
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a chaotic
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 combination of thoughts, it may be the reason why they
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attempt
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writing them.
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, it is noticed how some people are using a simplified
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 of writing, with no pressure for official behaviour.
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, o delivering their message in a quite chilled
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 is a
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 ticket not to be misunderstood or misled in some cases, as
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the message
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 is written straightforwardly.
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, the cases with informal letters and messages are
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common in almost every aspect of life.
Apperantly
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Apparently
, penning in a usual
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,
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 of
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 and strict
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, has
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 of advantages,
for instance
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, delivering and
recieving
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receiving
 urgent messages instantly than it used to be ages ago, as no
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criteria
criterion
 are followed, thanks to which both working class and students are facing
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 challenges.
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, there
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 no more hierarchy, all classes are treated in the same
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, including authorities and
proffessions
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professions
.
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free
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 of speech is an essential part of human beings Considering the flip side of the coin, it should be mentioned that
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this
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 tendency
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 making communicating smoother and simpler,
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may pose a threat in
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 term. An excellent example
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this
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the loss
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 of respect and responsibility in
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workplaces
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 and study buildings, which
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 originally supposed to be a place of literacy and formality.
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, some rules could be disobeyed, tasks could be uncompleted because of a flippancy atmosphere among people.
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, the informal and not
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strict
 form of written texts are
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the result
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 of chasing comfort and
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a fast
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way
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 of conveying information which has not only advantages, but
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few
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a few
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 threats to
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the generation
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Make sure to clearly state your main reasons in the introduction to guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Try to group similar ideas together in paragraphs to improve clarity.
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Proofread your writing to fix spelling mistakes and improve your argument.
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You clearly explained some reasons for the shift to informal writing.
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You identified both advantages and disadvantages of informal writing, which is good.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • informality
  • digital communication
  • texting
  • social media
  • instant messaging
  • generational shifts
  • brevity
  • personal expression
  • language standards
  • erosion
  • interlocutors
  • emojis
  • internet slang
  • academic contexts
  • language learning
  • misunderstandings
  • language teaching
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