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Writing Samples
Band 4

More and more plastic waste is polluting the world’s cities, countryside and oceans. What problems does this cause? What measures could be taken to solve them?

Nowadays the world is suffering in various ways mainly the plastic
waste
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problem
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. How does it affect us as humans? The answer is it still does in numerous ways,
first
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first,
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 the water pollution is
due to
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 the
waste
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 in the oceans people will get toxic if they drink from it.
On the other
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hand
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the
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plastic
waste
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affect
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affects
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 the animals as well sometimes even more,
for
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example
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 the
sinceseist
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sincerest
 notice that there
is
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are
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 a lot of
turtules
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turtles
dies
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dying
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due to
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 the oceans
pllouting
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polluting
 the reason behind it is
beacuse
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because
 people who drink things
such
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 as iced coffee, iced tea using a plastic straw and they tend to
thraw
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throw
 it in the ocean or the sea the hungry
turtules
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turtles
 will not
hasitate
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hesitate
 to eat it.
In addition
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, cities
who
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that
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 have a
lagre
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large
 number
from
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of
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 cars,
factories
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and factories
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 will get affected
from
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by
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the
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air
polluting
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pollution
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 and
due to
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 that the citizens will have
a
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dieses
a diesis
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dieses
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diseases
as
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for
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athsma
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asthma
 and other lunges problems morevore factories in a huge growth
as well as
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 cars.
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, the countryside surely is
efected
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affected
effected
 espaseliy in the soil where the air polluting and the
whater
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water
 polluting if they
combain togerther
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combine together
 will be a huge
problem
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 as
result
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a result
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 of that farmers will preduce
a
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toxice
vegtables
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vegetables
 and fruit and it will
cuase
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cause
 a health
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problem
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problems
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such
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 as human and wild animals
also
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 the sea animals. In
conclution
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conclusion
 to solve the
problem
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 we
unfortuntaly
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unfortunately
 have
a
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limted sloutions
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limited solutions
for example
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the
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apply
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air
polluting
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pollution
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 we can
slove
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solve
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 it by using
a
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electrice cars and for the plastice
waste
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 we can use a paper bag or
straw
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straws
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insted
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instead
 of plastice. The habitat
the
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that
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 we live in should be a
frined
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friend
 to us that we should care about.

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coherence and cohesion
Your introduction could be clearer; state the main issue of plastic waste more directly.
structure
Try to organize your points into clear paragraphs. Each point should be in its own paragraph.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your ideas. For example, give numbers or studies if possible.
language
Check your spelling and grammar, as mistakes make your writing harder to read.
task achievement
You have identified important issues related to plastic waste and its effects.
content
Your passion for the topic shines through in your writing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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