The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into the categories, from 1995 to 2002

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into the categories, from 1995 to 2002
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into the categories, from 1995 to 2002
The graph provides information about the percentage of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK,
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, national and international-fixed
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, and mobiles (all calls), over a seven-year period between 1995 and 2002. At a glance, what stands out from the graph is that there was a slight upward
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in the amount of long durations of telephone calls in domestic-fixed
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. Meanwhile, the least
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is phone
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even though it steadily increased year by year. Looking at the details, as regards local-fixed
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, the proportion started at just above 70% in 1995, and
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there was a gradual rise in the
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to 90%
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being the peak level of domestic calls during the whole period. In the following year, the
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marginally in the
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to just over 70% in 2002. If look at
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and International
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, the trend
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over the period
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at just under 40% in 1995 and reaching nearly 60% in 2002.
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, the percentage of
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using Mobiles had
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. Even though it started at just under 5% in 1995 which meant that
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method to communicate at that time, after that there was a marginal rise for four
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at just under 25% in 1999 before going up significantly in the
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recorded at 45% in 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, years, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.
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