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In recent year, space exploration has witnessed a significant argument across the globe, with more flights being operated for different purpose such as tourism, exploration, sicence discovery

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year
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,
space
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exploration
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 has witnessed a significant argument across the globe, with more flights being operated for different
purpose
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purposes
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such
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 as tourism,
exploration
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,
sicence
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science
 discovery.
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this
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tend
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 can
contributed
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contribute
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 to
enhacne
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enhancing
 disruptive
technology
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 and
also
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environment
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environmental
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 benefits, there is a belief that it significantly
wasted
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 money.
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 essay will agree with the notions of encouraging
exploration
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to
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of
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space
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. On the one hand,
main
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 reason for
space
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exploration
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 is the enhancement of
disrutive
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disruptive
technology
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 through the period. Simply put, with the high requirements of cutting-edge
equipments
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equipment
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, it promotes scientist around the world to
eventaully
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eventually
 upgrade their
technology
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, needless to say, the more advanced in the
space
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technology
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 move in
tadem
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tandem
 with the
reliative
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relative
 goods.
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, by adapting the vast amount of
space
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equipments
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equipment
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, many of them have been used for general life
such
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 as GPS and
statellites
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satellites
satellite
, which still play
a
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main
roles
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 in
transport
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system
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systems
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 and act as the way to connect
wireless
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 around the world.
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, if
space
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technology
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 became more advanced, that
technology
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 would later support people’s life in daily basic life. What
make
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space
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exploration
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particuluarly
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particularly
 reasonable is the benefits
relate
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 to
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the environments
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environments
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environment
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.
That is
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 to say,
statellites
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satellites
 have been wildly used
from
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by
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 many global
organization
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organizations
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, so that,
it
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they
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 can easily recognize
the
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naturall
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natural
 disaster
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 as
hurrican
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hurricane
hurricanes
 and
widefires
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wildfires
wide fires
, yet, the sooner rewarded , the more efficient in saving.
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USA
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 as an example where use a wide range of satellites and wheater sensors as
the
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a
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 way to act as
deterrent
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a deterrent
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againts
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against
 calamity, yet it
have
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 mostly contributed as
the
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a
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 way to give reliable pridictions.
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, if satellites which
was
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were
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 mainly promoted as
the
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part of
space
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exploration
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 became popularly
adapt
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in
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global
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, the danger
from
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disaster
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the disaster
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 would be reduced.
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, many people
believed
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 that
space
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exploration
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 is
uneffeciency
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inefficient
, particularly in
term
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terms
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 of wasting many. It may be true in some cases, but if there is a comparison, the debt for
space
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 experiments from
nasa
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NASA
 is even lower than the money which was
consumeed
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consumed
 for fast food
annual
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annually
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 in
USA
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the USA
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. Ultimately,
whereas
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government
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the government
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 prefer investing a
lagre
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large
 debt for
space
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exploration
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, it still just made up a minor
of
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economic. In conclusion,
eventhought
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even
,
a
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lagre
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large
 money for
space
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exploration
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 can be used for other charity reasons, there is no doubt that
space
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explorations
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exploration
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 not only
flourishs
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flourishes
flourish
of
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with
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technology
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 and guarantees for the
environment
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environmental
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 systems.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly express your main idea in the introduction. Your thesis statement should be clearer, stating your main points about space exploration.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your ideas. Each paragraph should connect well to the next, showing the reader how your arguments relate to each other.
coherence and cohesion
Use simpler sentences to express your ideas more clearly. This will help prevent confusion and improve understanding.
task achievement
You offer relevant examples of technology and environmental benefits from space exploration. This shows your ability to support your points with specific details.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic, and you attempt to engage with opposing views, which adds depth to your essay.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is mostly clear, with distinct paragraphs for each main idea, which is good for readability.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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