Some people believe that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others believe that it is getting easier. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is an ongoing debate regarding whether living in big
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is more difficult or easier.
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will prove that going to big
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is a bad choice. On the one hand, a lot of
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to the metropolises will lead to job competition.
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means that
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with an
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certificate may have a higher chance to be recruited and employed.
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,
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who do not have a degree or a better qualification may end up in unemployment,
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may increase the rate of
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problem.
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,
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will the claim residing in metropolitan areas is easier is not entirely baseless. One of the
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is that in big
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there are
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of services which may bring benefits to the citizens.
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, lots of
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services
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as up-to-date medical treatment, educational equipment and accommodations can help to improve
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's condition.
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point may be true, but the quality of
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may decrease if the
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are overloaded and out of control. The writer believes that staying in populous
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is difficult
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the wave of
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.
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is because
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who move to find a better
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, usually choose
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to settle down and
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will cause overpopulation.
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,
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issue may lead to
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housing shortage and
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lots of
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.
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, the homeless may commit crimes to deal with their
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problems which will result in the prevalence of crime in
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and threaten the citizens'
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life
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. In conclusion, job competition and
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are essential points that need to be considered to support
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inhabiting
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city hubs is hard.
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, it should have been shown that the opposite view may bring
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to a better
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through the variety of services, but
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reason may be true if urban areas are not overloaded.

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Improve your introduction by clearly stating your opinion and summarizing both views more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer connections between your ideas. Use linking words like 'however,' 'moreover,' and 'therefore' to help your flow.
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Make sure to explain your points in more detail. Adding specific examples can help support your arguments better.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling. Paying attention to these can improve the clarity of your writing.
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You successfully presented both views on the topic, which shows a good understanding of the question.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is structured with an introduction, body, and conclusion, which is great for coherence.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban aesthetics
  • promoting tourism
  • boosting local economies
  • enhancing residents' quality of life
  • mental well-being
  • functional design
  • urban challenges
  • population density
  • transportation
  • housing
  • conflict between beauty and functionality
  • urban planning
  • aesthetic appeal
  • practicality
  • case studies
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