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The graph below shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a computer science course at a UK university from 2010 to 2020. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a computer science course at a UK university from 2010 to 2020. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The line graph illustrates how many international
students
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 enrolled in a computer science course in a UK university over a ten-year period from 2010 to 2020.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 increased during the period, with some fluctuations. The trend was upward in general. In 2010, around 200
students
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 were enrolled, and the
number
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 slightly decreased in 2011 to around 180.
Then
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, it rose steadily to 300 in 2013. After that, it remained stable until 2015. In 2016, there was a sharp rise to about 400
students
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, and the
number
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 kept increasing until it reached its peak in 2019 at around 480.
However
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, in 2020, there was a slight drop to around 450. In conclusion, despite some small changes, the
number
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 of overseas
students
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 who took
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 course grew
overall
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 between 2010 and 2020.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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