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Researchers shoes that people now day sleepless than they used to in the past what does you think is the reasons behind this? what are the effect on individual and society?

Nowadays,
The
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apply
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life is too fast.
People
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 are running for different things in
there
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their
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 lives.
Such
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 as money,
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their family needs and all. Here I would like to tell my opinion that
due to
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this
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 fast-paced life,
people
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 are feeling sleepless than they used to in the past,
confirmed
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as confirmed
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 by the researchers.
Firstly
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, every individual
want
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wants
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 to be successful in their life. They wanted to give good lives to their family.
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 because every person is working hard and doing more
work
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. They don't even eat properly and are
taking
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feeling
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stress
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stressed
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. Stress and not
taking
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having
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meal
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a meal
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 at the proper
time
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is
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are
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one
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 of the biggest reasons, forks feels sleepless.
Secondly
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, If I compare
this
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 to the past lives of the
people
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, individuals are healthier as compared to today's generation. They used to give the proper
time
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to
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for
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there
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their
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meal
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meals
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,
work
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 and sleep. They don't have phones to use all day, as today's
people
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 mostly spend their
time
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 on the phone and most of the
work
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 is done on computers
as a result
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, their eyesight gets weak and they don't get proper sleep. In conclusion, if
people
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wants
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want
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 to get proper rest they should fix their schedule for their
meal
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meals
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,
work
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 and sleep
time
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. They should eat healthy food, take less tension and stop using laptops for
unnesseraly
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unnecessary
 things

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You provide a clear opinion on the topic.
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You identify important reasons for sleeplessness.
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Your conclusion gives a good solution to the problem.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sleep
  • stress
  • technology
  • anxiety
  • modern life
  • working hours
  • lifestyle
  • social activities
  • distractions
  • people
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