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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The scheme diagram illustrates the process of
production
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instant
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noodles
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 in the factory. In general, there are eight main steps of
production
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, starting with flour storage and ending with the packaging of the finished products. The process begins with the transporting of flour to the
mixter
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mixer
 section, where it is mixed in the bowl with water and oil. The next stage involves
to prepare
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 moisture dough sheets with the help of several rollers. After that,
sheets
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the sheets
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 are stripped into thin and long
noodles
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.
This
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 is followed by organising
noodles
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 discs.
Then
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,
discs
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the discs
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 are gone to the cooking and drying sector, where they are cooked in oil. In the subsequent step, dry
noodles
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 are placed in
the
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apply
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individual plastic cups with dry vegetables and specific spices for
flavor
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flavour
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.
Next
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The next
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 step is that
fulling
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full
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 cups are sealed with covers and labelled with stickers.
This
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 is the finish step of
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production
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the production
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noodles
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of noodles
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.
To sum up
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, in the manufacture of instant
noodles
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 exists eight steps of
production
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, noodles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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