Your workplace does not have a car park, causing some problems. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter describe the problems; explain what benefits a car park would bring to the company; suggest a solution for the car park problem.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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letter to address the issue of
car
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parking as our workplace does not have a
car
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park. The major problem faced by the employees
while
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parking their
car
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is to find a suitable place to park their vehicle and
this
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is an everyday problem. Sometimes we have to park our cars on the side of the road which results in traffic jams on the roads and most of
time
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the time
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we
also
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have to pay
penalty
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a penalty
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due to
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parking in a private space. It is vital to make a separate
car
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parking for our office. In
this
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way, workers will not have to worry about parking their vehicles0. It not only reduces the traffic on the road but
also
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ensures
safety
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the safety
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of vehicles. I would like to suggest you buy some piece of land near our shop
,
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apply
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so that a proper parking lot will be there for the workers. It would be great if you could
also
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hire a security guard for the protection of our automobiles. I would really appreciate it if you consider my application and take action as soon as possible. Yours Faithfully, Dilpreet Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check for any spelling mistakes, like 'vehicles0'.
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Use clear connections between your ideas to help the reader follow your message more easily.
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Add a short introduction to make clear what the letter is about at the start.
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Make sure each paragraph has one main idea to make it easier to read.
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You clearly describe the problems faced by employees regarding parking.
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The letter has a formal tone, appropriate for a workplace setting.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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