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Band 4

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and with relevant evidence.

There are many countries today leak of
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apply
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economy
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 and
education
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.,
whihc
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which
is
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apply
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creat
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creates
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poperty
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popularity
among of
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in
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the
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apply
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society. There is an Idea appeared
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nowadays
nowday
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nowadays
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develop
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developed
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country
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countries
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has
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are
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 responsible
to help
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for helping
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poor
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the poor
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country
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countries
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, in order to ensure all human has better
life
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lives
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 and
education
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Economy
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 is the
most
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biggest
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 problem that developing countries
faced
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face
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 currently.
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happen
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happened
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since
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because
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 could not manage their natural resource and how to make
it
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them
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 work
weel
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well
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.
As
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depeloved
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developed
deployed
country
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 who has good preparation in
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economy
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the economy
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 should be able to help the poor
country
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 to make sure their citizen could survive.
That
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The
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 things that need to understand
is
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are
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.
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 is responsible for all human
being
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beings
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 especially that
country
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who
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that
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 has all the
thing
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things
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. In
term
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terms
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 of
,
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the economy
Economy
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,
Education
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 etc.
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, Lack of
education
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 is one of the biggest
problem
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problems
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 that need to
solve
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be solved
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. To
creat
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create
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good
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a good
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 system and good
policy
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policies
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,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should be able to provide
good
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a good
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education
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 for the young
genartaion
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generation
. Since they will be
next
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the next
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 generation
lead
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leading
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 the
country
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 and must have
good
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a good
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 understanding to be
leader
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leaders
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. These are the
reason
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reasons
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 why developed
country
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 has
big
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a big
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responsible
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responsibility
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 to help
the
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apply
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poor
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country
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countries
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. where
depoloved
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deployed
devolved
country
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 has good in every sector
interm
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in terms
in term
 of,
economy
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 and
Education
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. Develop
country
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 must open their eyes
about
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to
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this
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 case. since it will
be advantaged
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advantage
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 them to have good
relation
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relations
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 and give them more information
abaout
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about
 culture and trust.
Finally
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,
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Economy
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the Economy
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 and
Education
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is
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are
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fundametal
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fundamental
 for every
country
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, which should
be address
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be addressed
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 by the
goverment
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government
especially
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, especially
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developed
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in developed
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country
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countries
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. As we are social
human
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humans
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 that
could not
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cannot
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 stand by
our self
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ourselves
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.
Therefore
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,
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a develped
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develped
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developed
country
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 has
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a fundametal
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fundametal
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fundamental
 role
to help
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in helping
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ans
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and
solve
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solving
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this
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 case by helping poor
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country
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countries
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task achievement
Your introduction needs to clearly state your opinion. Try to give a strong thesis statement.
coherence cohesion
Use clearer paragraph structure. Each paragraph should have its main idea and supporting details.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to check spelling and grammar. For example, 'leak of the economy' should be 'lack of economy'.
task achievement
Add specific examples to support your claims. This makes your argument stronger and more convincing.
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You have shown awareness of important issues like economy and education.
task achievement
Your argument about the relationship between developed and developing countries is a good start.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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