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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pictures below depict the
difference
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 layout of a public library between
present
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the present
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 and two decades before.
Overall
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, the central library today has been modernized with additional amenities to improve
their
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its
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 services. In
todays
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today's
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 layout, the four rooms on each corner of the library are adjusted, to become
rectangle
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 shaped, with no tables and chairs in the
center
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 of it.
On
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 the hallway outside the rooms,
for
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apply
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all reference books are placed on the east.
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, adult fiction books with information desk are placed on the west side, with three self-service machines behind.
For the
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 top left
handside
Correct your spelling
hand side
room
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, it
contain
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 two sofas,
storytelling
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and storytelling
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 events with
kid's
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a kid's
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 fiction books collection, replacing
the
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apply
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computer related
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stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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. Meanwhile, the bottom left space is used for only computer
room
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 at
this
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 moment rather than
reading
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a reading
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room
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 for newspapers and magazines.
On the other hand
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, the top right
room
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 is utilized for
lecture
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a lecture
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 classroom,
while
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for
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apply
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the bottom right
functioned
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functions
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for
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as
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 a Cafe.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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