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In some contries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In my opinion, renting the
place
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 is easier than
owing
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owning
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 a
place
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 as
alot
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a lot
 of
maintanenance
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maintenance
 goes into
owing
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owning
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 a
place
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. The
place
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 requires constant back and forth when tenants are living making it a hassle for the owner.
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, when we look at the bright side of
this
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 renting does have its perks as one can choose where they want to live,
what
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and what
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 kind of luxuries they want in their apartment
as well
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as
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and
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 it
also
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 gives them the room
have
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apply
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freedom of what kind of apartment or house they want.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion on whether owning a home is positive or negative.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear transitions between your ideas to improve the flow.
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Add specific examples to support your points, like mentioning costs or security.
task achievement
You presented different viewpoints on renting and owning a home.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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