Hw. Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with? Explain why.

Some people advocate that a college or university
education
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should be available to all
students
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whereas
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others advocate that higher
education
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should be available only to good
students
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. As far as I am concerned, Higher
Education
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should be available for only bright
students
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because of two reasons: affordability and the number of limited good teachers. First of all, money is one of the most important
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of higher
education
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because, to give a good
education
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,
universities
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need a library that
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many books and academic resources.
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,
universities
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need laboratories to give science lectures. The
government
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should afford
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of expenditures
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universities
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.
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, if the number of
universities
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increases
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high demand, the
government
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can struggle to give funds and it can be declined the quality of
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.
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but not least, the figures of good teachers are limited. Good teachers are very important to give good lectures for
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, and they generate the milestone
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many
universities
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. Thanks to these people,
students
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can improve their ability
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and they contribute
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new perspectives.
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, these professors search
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many new things and raise the degree of
universities
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. If the
government
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establish many
universities
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, most of these
universities
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cannot include these professors and
students
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cannot benefit from their experience. It means that
students
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will not improve themselves when they graduate.
To sum up
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, higher
education
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should be available for a few
students
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because of the reasons that I mentioned. If the
government
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allow to
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many
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universities
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, the
students
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who graduate from these institutions will not improve themselves and they will not have different perspectives to do something.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal access
  • higher education
  • academic excellence
  • personal development
  • meritocratic
  • resource allocation
  • inclusive education
  • social equity
  • innovation
  • education pathways
  • academic performance
  • career opportunities
  • societal benefits
  • selective education
  • quality assurance
  • financial constraints
  • motivation
  • education standards
  • accessibility
  • equity and inclusion
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