The pie chart illustrates several destinations of anthropology alumni from one university after they finished their bachelor degree and the table gives information on the payment of the anthropology graduates after working for 5 years.

The pie chart illustrates several destinations of anthropology alumni from one university after they finished their bachelor degree and the table gives information on the payment of the anthropology graduates after working for 5 years.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart illustrates several destinations of anthropology alumni from one university after they finished their bachelor degree and the table gives information on the payment of the anthropology graduates after working for 5 years.
The chart displays information about Anthropology graduates who did
anything
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after
completed
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completing
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their undergraduate degree course in an education centre,
then
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the table illustrates the
salaries
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of anthropologists in occupation after a 5-year period.
Overall
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, over half of graduates prefer full-time
work
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,
on the other hand
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, half of government sector employees took advantage
on
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salaries
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within
this
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period. Detailed analysis of the bar chart, the rates of graduates in full-time postgrad study and
not
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those not
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known are equal to each other(8%). the sum of proportions of unemployed and part-time
work
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+ postgrad study learners almost close to university leavers in part-time
work
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, they are 17% and 15%,respectively.
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salaries
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, freelance consultants and government sector workers’s salary rates are similar to each other for both $ 25,000-49,999 and $ 50,000-74,999 .
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, employees who
work
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in private companies get lower rates at $ 100,000 compared to other sectors, which account for 30%.
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, the workers in private companies have
high
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proportion of $ 50,000-74,999(35%) compared to employees’
salaries
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in
government
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the government
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sector and freelance consultants.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • bachelor's degree
  • anthropology alumni
  • employment sectors
  • salary ranges
  • academic roles
  • field research
  • public sector
  • non-profit organizations
  • private sector jobs
  • continuing education
  • job market trends
  • financial prospects
  • career progression
  • economic context
  • geographic location
  • cost of living
  • salary increases
  • experience
  • earning potential
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