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The chart below shows the number of students from four different countries applying to European universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of students from four different countries applying to European universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart presents the
number
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 of
students
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 from four different countries(China, Japan, USA, Russia) applying to the universities of one European country from 2004 to 2008.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 from China is decreasing, but the
number
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 of
students
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 from the USA and Japan is increasing.
While
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 Russian
students
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 are approximately the same in all 5 years.
To begin
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 with, the highest
number
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 of
students
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 from China was in 2004 about 27000
students
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, and it decreased to about 15000
students
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 in 2008.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 from the USA was about 17000
students
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 in 2004, and it had increased to more than 25000 in 2008.
Additionally
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, the
number
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 of Russian
students
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 was less than 5000
students
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 in all years.
However
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, The
number
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 of
students
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 from Japan was more than 5000
students
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 in 2004, and it had increased to approximately about 10000
students
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 in 2008.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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