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The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
The given map illustrates
a
Correct article usage
the
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 possibility of
construct
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constructing
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 a new
restaurant
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 for a company in two different places in Paris.
Overall
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 ,
as
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apply
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it
show
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shows
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 that both locations are located in order with a view of
Eiffel
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the Eiffel
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Tower
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 in
a full population areas
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full population areas
a full population area
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. Plan one is to build the
restaurant
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in
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on
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 the north side of the centre of Paris, which will provide a full view of the whole
tower
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 .
In addition
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, it would be close to the Maritime
museum
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Museum
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, which has a huge number of 8000 daily visitors which will lead to more customers.
Moreover
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, it’s in the front of the aquarium
that
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apply
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contain
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contains
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 2000 visitors each day and that would attract more people to the
restaurant
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. Plan B is building the
restaurant
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 next to
Eiffel
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the Eiffel
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Tower
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 in the south direction of Paris’s centre, which is one of the most popular places to visit in the world with
a
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apply
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numerously
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numerous
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 visitors every day around 10,000
person
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people
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. The
restaurant
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 is located between
evil
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Evil
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Tower
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 and
art
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the art
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 gallery .
Furthermore
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, there are park and
sport
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sports
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 centre nearby.
Also
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, it is not far away from Bir Hekeim Metro Station which
make
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makes
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 it the possible direction for
tourist
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tourists
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 to eat in.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurant, tower with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • boost business
  • public transportation
  • accessibility
  • upscale neighborhood
  • demographic
  • premium
  • menu items
  • competition
  • market saturation
  • rental costs
  • operational costs
  • profit margins
  • foot traffic
  • amenities
  • business offices
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