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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.
The pie charts
provides
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provide
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 all
world
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enery
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energy
 uses and
electricity
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 creation for the past year.
Overall
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, it is clear from the charts that there
is
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are
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 a number of main resources that are more important than others.
In addition
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, we can see that most of
all
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the
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of
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apply
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world
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world's
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electricity
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 generation
comes
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come
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 from coal,
whereas
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 a lot of total
world
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 energy consumption
generated
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is generated
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out of
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from
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 oil.
According to
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 what is shown, total
world
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electricity
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 generation has about three main power sources, the most significant one is oil with about 34%, the second one
of
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on
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 the list is coal with almost 25%, the
last
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 major source is gas with
approximatly
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approximately
 21%. In
term
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terms
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 of, total
world
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electricity
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 generation as
what
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apply
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we have said the massive source of energy is coal with nearly 40%, where
is
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apply
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gas comes in
the
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apply
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second place right after coal with about 20%, the third and fourth sources are hydro and nuclear with
simmiler
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similar
percentige
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percentage
 which is 16%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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