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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people think space research is a waste of money. The government should spend that money on the improvement of people’s living conditions. What is your opinion on this IELTS topic?

Many individuals believe that research for space is
waste
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a waste
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 of money. The authority should keep
this
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 fund to focus on
enhence
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enhance
enhanced
 their
nations
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nation's
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environmental
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. I totally agree with
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 point
out
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, and my essay below will
illustrates
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 my view. First
of
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my opinion is: Many People and
animal
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animals
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already
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have already
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suffed
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suffered
stuffed
alot
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a lot
 from Climate change so the government should
provides
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provide
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 more responsibilities to prevent global warming by
improve
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improving
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 the project of renewable sources , some
organization
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organizations
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already
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have already
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a loss
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loss
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 of
their
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the
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abilities
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ability
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 to support their plans,
for example
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, the
none-profit
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non-profit
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 organization in
india
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India
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was give
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 up their regulation natural resources because of
unadequat
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inadequate
 funding.
Second
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of
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my
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apply
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reason is
: One
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that one
 of the most important
aspect
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aspects
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 of a global is Education , The Country leaders should consider
to gives
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giving
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 more
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 for
young
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the young
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 generation to earn more
on
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knowlegde
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knowledge
. with plenty of
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professionals
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professional
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professional,
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 the world seems to be peaceful and comfortable for living species.
for instance
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, the
undevolopment
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development
 country is the majority of
numberious
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numerous
criminal
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criminals
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 and
also
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 easy to make a conflict. in conclusion, The government should
be
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apply
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allocate the
propriate
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appropriate
 amount of expenditure
focus
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focused
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 on improving the
environmental
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environment
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 and the educational
outweigt
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outweighed
 outer space research.

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coherence
Make sure to structure your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
task achievement
Try to give strong examples to support your ideas. This will help the reader understand your points better.
general
Check your grammar and spelling. Common mistakes make your essay less clear.
task achievement
You clearly express your opinion on the topic, which is important.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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