Some people believe that the purpose of education is to prepare individuals to be useful members for society. Others say that the purpose of education is to achieve personal wishes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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to be useful members
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society
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. And others say that the
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is to achieve personal wishes. In
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I will discuss both views and give
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my
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people
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believe that the
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is to prepare
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to be useful members
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society
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. In my
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this
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is the reasonable and right
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because
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situation,
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and organizations can get benefit either from knowledge or
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profitability
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they
will see there is no reason can stop them from achieving
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success
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, I have another
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say that the
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is to achieve personal wishes. I strongly disagree with
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because
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can achieve their personal wishes and be useful
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the same time. So there is nothing
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when the
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can get their personal wishes with organizations not just themselves. In conclusion, I discuss both views and give my
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. Everyone can talk about their
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but
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focused
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my
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because it's represented me and either
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, the
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can be useful but I completely agree with the
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which is
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believe that the
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is to prepare
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to be useful for
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task achievement
Make sure to write clearly about both sides of the argument. Give a strong opinion in the end.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'in conclusion' to connect your ideas better.
coherence cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar. For example, 'beacause' should be 'because', and 'thay' should be 'they'.
task achievement
You clearly state your opinion at the end of the essay. This shows good understanding of the task.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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