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The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate the number of
hours
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 that juveniles study each
day
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 at five different universities.
Overall
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, it can be seen that students at
University
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 C spend the most
time
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 studying per
day
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 on weekdays,
whereas
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 students at
University
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 D spend
time
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 the least
time
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 in both periods. At first glance, on weekdays, students at
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university
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University
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 C spend 10.6
hours
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 per
day
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 studying followed by
University
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 B (10.1
hours
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),
University
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 E (10
hours
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), and
University
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 A ( 9.8
hours
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), respectively. Meanwhile,
University
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 D
spend
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 the least
time
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 at 9.6
hours
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 per
day
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. In terms of weekends, the amount of
time
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 juveniles spend studying significantly decreases at every college.
University
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 A reports 9
hours
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 of studying
time
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, slightly higher than
8.6
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the 8.6
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hours
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 recorded at
University
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 B,
while
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 the
time
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 spent at
University
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 C
nd
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and
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 E drops noticeably to 7.8 and 6.2
hours
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.
University
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 D still
record
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records
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 the least amount of study
time
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, day, university, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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