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Some people think that to lead a successful life, a university degree is important. Others believe that this is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that many
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 believe that to lead a successful life, a
university
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 degree is important. Others think that
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 is no longer true nowadays. I consider that a
university
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degree
 is important to lead a successful life.
This
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 essay will analyze
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 topic from both points of view. On the one hand, some people think that a
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university
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 degree is important to lead a successful life
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 because taking a
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 degree will offer
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people to have better job opportunities

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task achievement
Make sure to complete all your points clearly and include a conclusion to summarize your opinion.
coherence
Organize your ideas in a clear order, separate paragraphs for each point could help.
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Use more specific examples to support your points about job opportunities and other views.
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You have a clear introduction outlining the topic.
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You state your opinion, making it clear where you stand on the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • benchmark
  • evolving landscape
  • credential
  • vocational training
  • entrepreneurship
  • digital literacy
  • autodidact
  • innovative approaches
  • skill set
  • networking
  • lifelong learning
  • meritocracy
  • practical experience
  • self-taught
  • upskilling
  • resilience
  • adaptive learning
  • critical thinking
  • soft skills
  • technological advancements
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