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Band 3.5

Some people say that the Internet will soon become the preferred method of delivery of the news and information, causing the newspapers and magazines to gradually disappear. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include examples from your knowledge or experience. I'm

It is debatable that the Internet will be the
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dominant
 method of
recieving
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receiving
news
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 and information, leading to traditional methods
such
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 newspapers and magazines
to
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gradually
vanish
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. I strongly agree; people now live on the run, and new generations get
news
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 from the internet more
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than
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 any other place. The new lifestyles of the majority of people
is
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 living on the run. In my
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point
 of
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this
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 trend forces them to get information
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whether political
, technical, or even personal about their friend and family via the Internet. Human interactions throughout the years have been
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.
for
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instance
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 friends get on
eachothers
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each other's
 lives through social media posts, senior citizens now check their mobile
news
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 applications to get a hang of
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what's
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 happening in the world,
even
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and even
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 kids attend
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some
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 of their school classes online. As new generations
take
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 by, the consumption of physical material decreases significantly. In my community, youths are updated with world
news
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 online!
i
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 have never seen a kid holding a newspaper, or any kind of printed documentation to extract information, they in fact may be influenced by their older siblings
,
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 or
care givers
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;
due to
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 their new way of living, they definitely use the same techniques to fetch insights. In conclusion, the use of digital platforms, and media
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 rapidly increasing all over the globe. Individuals sticking to old methods of getting
news
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 will definitely be behind in their knowledge.

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task achievement
Make sure to use clear examples to support your opinions. You can explain how the internet is more accessible than newspapers.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar to avoid mistakes that can confuse readers. For example, 'dominant' instead of 'domenant' and 'whether' instead of 'wethier'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas in a clearer way. Start with a strong introduction and end with a clear conclusion that summarizes your views.
task achievement
You expressed a clear opinion on the topic, which is important for the essay.
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Your examples relate well to the topic, showing how the internet affects people's lives.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Internet
  • news
  • information
  • newspapers
  • magazines
  • delivery
  • popular
  • people
  • access
  • update
  • example
  • events
  • social media
  • share
  • spread
  • quickly
  • traditional
  • online
  • adapt
  • digital
  • age
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