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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Consumers should be forced to buy electric-powered vehicles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Recently, people
argue
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 about whether the
country
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country's
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 government should have some rules
in
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about
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the
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transport, especially
cars
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. Some say that all individuals must drive
cars
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 that support electric charging,
while
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 others believe that it’s not permissible to use the upper hand.
This
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 essay will discuss both opinions and I will draw my own in the conclusion.
In addition
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, electric
cars
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 can
drag
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 many benefits with
it
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them
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.
Firstly
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, it can help the
economical
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 status of the country by providing less demand on oil export if it does not produce enough oil or not at all.
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, it gives the environment more qualities; one of them is maintaining
the
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air pollution by having extra fresh air for trees, flowers and other living creatures. Interestingly,
in
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some
studies
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 it has shown that the main problem that affects
the
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global warming is
pollution
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the pollution
a pollution
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 of all kinds that
cars
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 with gas users.
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, it is not permissible for anyone to use force but providing educational programs must be given.
Furthermore
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, beneficial advice has to be shared among all individuals.
On the other hand
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, people should consider that not all
cars
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 should be replaced. The biggest purpose is many car manufacturers and dealerships would lose stocks;
consequently
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, unemployment will
get over
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 many citizens.
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, the economy of the nation will fail if it depends on exporting only eco-friendly
cars
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.
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, the states will suffer from providing many human needs.
To sum up
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, those kinds of
solution
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solutions
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 are essential but only for specific countries.
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,
as if
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we did
it
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apply
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in Japan, a country most
of
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the
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economical
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economically
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 stable
is
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in
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 exporting
cars
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. If I
was
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were
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 in the
government
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government's
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hand
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hands
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 I would provide a solution with long-term and try to convince a group of influencers to be more professional.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion early in the essay. This helps readers understand your position.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clearer connections between your ideas. Try using more linking words to help the reader follow your thoughts.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. This makes your arguments stronger.
Content
You have touched on important topics like the environment and the economy.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • innovation
  • sustainable
  • fossil fuels
  • renewable energy
  • economic implications
  • financial burden
  • government subsidies
  • social equity
  • mobility
  • transport accessibility
  • charging infrastructure
  • feasible option
  • combatting climate change
  • emissions
  • accelerate
  • mandate
  • disparities
  • hybrid approach
  • technological innovation
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