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The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the data
of
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 railways as
means
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a means
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 of transportation for goods and people in Malaysia, Canada,
China
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 and UAE during 2007.
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, it is evident that
majority
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the majority
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 of Chinese boarded traditional trains for mobilisation
whereas
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 Canadians utilised railways as
means
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a means
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 for trade of cargo. In terms of Malaysia, 5.9
million
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 of
total
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the total
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 population used rails for travelling.
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, 27
million
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 residents of
China
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 utilised trains for moving.
Additonally
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Additionally
, individuals from UAE and Canada using rail accounted for 5.5
million
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 and 0.3
million
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, respectively. In terms of passenger
kilometre
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kilometres
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 per head of population,
China
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 occupied
higher
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 average in comparison
of
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to
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 other nations.
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, all the countries traded significant
amount
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amounts
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 of cargo by railways resulting in more than 20
billions
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billion
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of
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tons. Canada traded 28.20
biilions
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billion
billions
 and
China
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 exported and imported 23.01 tonnes of goods through trains.
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, the quantity of cargo mobilised by Malaysia and UAE was 22.2 for the former and 21.9
billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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tons for the
later
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latter
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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