Some people think moves only be for entertainment. Others think that they should also have educational values. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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people believe that watching movies should be part of their activity, some think it is
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good for educational purposes
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others think it is important for their day-to-day
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are good for anyone
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selecting their purpose. First and foremost, the film industry has done a tremendous task for human activities positively and it become happy for their activity.
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humans' everyday lives could be freer
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watching movies.
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, most
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films
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are important for avoiding their
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stress.
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, most of them like to watch thrilling
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like Mr.Bean.
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, we must think before watching some
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, because that content is not good for children's studies.
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, watching some cartoon characters has a bad impact on their thinking habits and
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the future generation
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not a quality ones. In conclusion, some educational
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as documentaries, would help to improve pupil's quality and good study knowledge.
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, I believe that the film industry should include many studying values
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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states both views and your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to improve the flow of ideas.
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Support your arguments with more examples and details.
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Your conclusion summarizes your opinion on educational films well.

Your opinion

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