the graph below shows the favourite sport of pepole from The USA between 1985 and 2015

the graph below shows the favourite sport of pepole from The USA between 1985 and 2015
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the graph below shows the favourite sport of pepole from The USA between 1985 and 2015
The line graph gives
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a comparison
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of the favourite
sport
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sports
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of
the
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US
citizen
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citizens
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from1985
to
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from
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2015.
Overall
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, three
sports
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became more popular
American
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football ,
Basketball
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, and other
sports
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‘. and two
sports
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became less popular Baseball and Hockey.
while
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American
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fotball
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football
remained consistently the most popular sport , Hockey became the less. The
sports
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that increased in popularity are
American
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football ,
Basketball
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, and other
sports
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.
American
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fotball
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football
was the favourite throughout the period.
In
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From
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1985 to 2000, its popularity hovered between 36% and
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38%, before increasing to 20% in 2000. (where it remained until 2015).
Basketball
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, which started as the third favourite sport at 15 %,dipped slightly before rising to 20% in 2000. there was a
seconed dipp
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second drop
in 2005 ,
afterward
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there was a consistent increase for a decade, meaning that
Basketball
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overtook baseball place.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, american, basketball with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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