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IELTS Ecotourism is now defined as responsible travel to natural areas that conserves the environment. What are the advantages of ecotourism? How can we make ecotourism more popular?

To understand
about
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any ecosystem we need to travel there for knowledge of
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environment
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 well-being. Nowadays,
ecotourism
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 is extremely
popoular
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popular
between
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among
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 all
the
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age groups who
loves
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naural
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natural
 beauty. There are many benefits of
the
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eocotourism
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ecotourism
and how we can boast
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this
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, which I will define
into
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 the impending
paragraphes
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paragraphs
. There are many cons of nature tourism. First the foremost, learn about new spices and plants. To
eloborate
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elaborate
this
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, when we visit
new
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 place,
then
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 we get knowledge about the local
environment
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 of that location.
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, It helps
to
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people indulge
into
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the
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different
culture
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cultures
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 with
the
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respect,
such
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wear
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wearing
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there
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 traditional clothes and
eat
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eating
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 their native food. Even
through
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 being a good
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tourist
tourisit
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 we can save the
environment
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 by not
increase
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 the pollution there.
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, always collect
own
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 trash after the visit. Not only
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, using local transports and shops during their travel, which help to increase their economy.
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,
ecotourism
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 can get more
popularity
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on
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 the individual and government
level
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levels
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. Putting the positive experience about their trips on social accounts and
publish
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 in the local newspaper so more people read about
that
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 places and in future they can visit over there.
Furthermore
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,
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government
governments
goveronment
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government
 should provide
goos
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good
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facilities
fecilities
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facilities
 to tourists so they can do a
lot
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ecotourism
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To conclude
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,
according to
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 me,
ecotourism
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 is good for the economy and
environment
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 of that place. Through
this
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, we can get more resources and
way
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ways
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 to
get
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 success in
the
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life.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea and stick to it. Try to connect your ideas in a clear way.
task achievement
Your introduction could be clearer. Try to state what you will talk about more directly.
language use
Use correct spelling and grammar to make your writing easier to understand. Check for small mistakes.
task achievement
You have identified some key benefits of ecotourism, which is good for task response.
task achievement
You've made an effort to engage with the topic and express your ideas, which is commendable.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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