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Band 4.5

Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Life is more complex right now, the longer we live
in
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on
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earth
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the earth
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 the more
rubbish
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 we
producing
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produce
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 and
rubbish
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 is one of the biggest
problem
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problems
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 that we face recently, there are a lot of
people
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 didn't care about
this
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 problem
due to
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 our understanding and awareness of
importance
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the importance
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 to keep nature clean is really less. we often
to
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ignore the
environment
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 until we don't realize can affect our daily life
especially
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, especially
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 in
city
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a city
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 or village. it
is
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has
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 happened because
of
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the
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apply
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society
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didn't
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doesn't
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 have enough understanding about
negative
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the negative
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 impact of
rubbish
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, and the
amont
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number
 of
people
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in
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 the earth now more and more, so that
why
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is why
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 the
rubbish
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producing
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is produced
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 more because our needs
such
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 as food and beverage vast majority made by
non organic
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non-organic
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rubbish
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, and need more long time if we try to break it. but
also
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 lack of
awarness
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awareness
 to throw
rubbish
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 in the bin is the biggest
issues
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issue
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 that we face right now. there are plenty of
people
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 did not care about it, even they throw the
rubbish
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 wherever they want so that why
make
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makes
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 the
environment
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more dirty
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dirtier
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.
For example
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in
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on
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 the beach, there
are
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is
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 a lot of
rubbish
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 there, and you can see everywhere always
rubbish
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 as long as you see the beach, and
people
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 often use the beach to throw their
rubbish
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 and it
break
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breaks
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the
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apply
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nature. In order
this
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rubbish
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reduce
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, the
government
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 must engage in
this
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 core problem, the
goverment
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government
 should give the understanding to
the
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apply
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society
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 that we can not let
this
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 happen anymore. because we know that the understanding and
awarness
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awareness
 of
society
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 is very
less
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little
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 about the importance
to keep
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of keeping
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 the
environment
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 clean, so
government
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 should educate
society
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 about
rubbish
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 perhaps
like do
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providing
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 general education
how
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on how
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 to manage the
rubbish
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 and change it into something useful, it is
aim
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aiming
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 to enhance the
awarness
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awareness
 and understanding of the
society
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.
moreover
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,
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government
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the government
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also
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 must provide
the
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apply
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facilities like
bin
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bins
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every
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in every
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 house in order the
society
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are
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to be
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 able to put the
rubbish
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 in the right place. At least the
rubbish
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not
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does not
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 disrupt the
environment
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,
this
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the
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is the
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 best thing that
society
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 and
government
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 can do to reduce the
rubbish
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in
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on
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 earth.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows logically to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple and clear sentences to express your ideas better.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling to make your writing clearer.
task achievement
You have identified key issues and gave examples of rubbish in public places like the beach.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • disposable culture
  • over-packaging
  • non-recyclable
  • public awareness
  • waste management
  • environmental impact
  • recycle
  • recycling facilities
  • waste separation
  • single-use products
  • infrastructure
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