Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Advertisement is one solution to promote the company produces, about the task,
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prefer that advertisement is one of the best
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tricks
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to tell us about new products and may improve our lives. because, in
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modern era, all
company
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companies
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use
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maximilize
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maximise
their public trust
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products
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the products
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they have
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. there are
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of strategy to make
advertisement
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advertisements
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in
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moment, not just put
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the side of roads, but social media and
website
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useful.
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through
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my experience yesterday, i have buy some
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products
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from
influencer
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an influencer
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video
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watched
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Instagram
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instagram
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about
sport t-shirt
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sports t-shirts
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, is make
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your
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our
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day
enjoy
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apply
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when you do sport

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coherence and cohesion
Work on using clear and correct grammar in your sentences.
task achievement
It would help to better explain how advertisements improve lives with specific examples.
coherence and cohesion
Try to add more structure to your essay: Introduction, Body, and Conclusion.
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You provided a personal example, which makes your writing more relatable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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