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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 people must have schools to teach every
childs
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child
 or every young
person
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 to be a good parent in the future because the young
person
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 like
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we
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can teach anything
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true and wrong for them. and
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they
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lession
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lessons
 they have from
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children
, they must have kind of personality
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because
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 make a good
person
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 in the future. the
school
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 teach many lessons
for
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 everyone and in
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school
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 we learn to try to be the best and be
good
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a good
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student
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students
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. the teacher in the
school
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 can give a young
person
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example
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for
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to
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how to
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 be a good
people
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person
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their
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life
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. the teacher
have
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 character kind,smart and
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diligent
 for their student because it
make
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 the student thinks they can do like that. but
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children
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school
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 or knowledge
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grow
with
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 people
in
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low
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 mindset for their
life
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, because every child or young
person
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they
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learn and
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repeat
 what they see as they grow. so if they
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people
have
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who have
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bad
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a bad
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attitude
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attitudes
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 and without
knowledge
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knowledge,
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 they must grow with
bad
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a bad
the bad
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person
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people
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 too. so
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school
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 is very
importan
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important
 because it can help everyone to know the world
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without
 they visit the country. the
school
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 can be
place
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a place
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speend
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spend
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childhood with new many
peolpe
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people
the
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they
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 meet in their
life
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 for the first
school
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 and they can be
bestfriend
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best friend
best friends
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place
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places
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 or
experience
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experiences
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 in their
life
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. your childhood with good memorize can be a good parent for your future kids because you grow happy, a lot of experience and
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knowledge
.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a main idea and supporting details.
task achievement
Make sure each point you make directly answers the question about being a good parent.
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Use more specific examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling, as these can make your ideas hard to understand.
task achievement
You show a strong belief in the importance of education for future parents.
task achievement
You discuss the role of teachers positively, which is a good perspective.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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