Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Many people argue that the teenage years are the most joyful period of a person's
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others believe that adulthood, despite its responsibilities, brings greater satisfaction. Personally,
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believe that both perspectives have valid reasoning, but teenage
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can bring more meaningful happiness. On the one hand, adult
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allows people to make their own decisions, choose their careers, and build families. These achievements can bring a strong sense of purpose and long-term delight.
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, adults may feel really proud when they raise their children well or buy a house and car.
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, adults often face various obligations
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as work pressure, financial status, and taking care of others like their parents, which can lead to stress and less free time.
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, teenage
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is usually more carefree. Teenagers often live with their parents,
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they do not have to think about finances or even work full-time. They have more time to spend and hang out with friends, and enjoy hobbies. School
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when sometimes stressful, is generally balanced with social activities and personal growth.
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, many teenagers experience meaningful friendships, and limitless potential, which can be deeply fulfilling. In conclusion,
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adulthood has its own kind of happiness, I believe the teenage years are the happiest times in
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because they are filled with freedom, fun, and fewer obligations.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Formative years
  • Autonomy
  • Fulfillment
  • Wisdom
  • Significant choices
  • Exploration
  • Financial responsibilities
  • Deeper relationships
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishments
  • Character development
  • Life milestones
  • Adulthood
  • Adolescence
  • Carefree nature
  • Achievements
  • Life satisfaction
  • Stress-free
  • Independence
  • Responsibilities
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