Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some say that this information may be relevant and useful. others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many employers ask several personal questions

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basic

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to identify the proper fit for a job. A wide range of people

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that

this

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information

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is irrelevant and promotes biased decisions based on race, gender and

favoritism

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. Others believe

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information

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is necessary to know more about the candidates and identify whether they are a suitable fit for the job or not. I firmly believe that

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is necessary owing to changing job roles, use of creativity and

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involvement

of candidates in extra

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curricular

activities.

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Task Achievement

Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. Add more details to explain why you think personal information is needed.

Coherence

Improve the flow of your ideas by using linking words, such as 'firstly', 'moreover', and 'finally'. This will help to connect your points better.

Task Achievement

Provide specific examples to support your opinions. For example, you could give a scenario where knowing a candidate's hobbies helped in a hiring decision.

Coherence

Your introduction presents the topic and shows both sides of the argument well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

88 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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