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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The table and pie charts illustrate the sources of police funding and how the money was spent in one area of
United
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 Kingdom in 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, the police
budget
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 increased slightly from 2017 to 2018. Most of the money came from the National Government in both years. In terms of expenditure, the majority of the
budget
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 was spent on salaries,
although
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this
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 share decreased in 2018. In 2017, the total police
budget
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 was £304.7
million
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, which gradually rose to £318.6
million
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 in 2018. The largest source of funding came from the National Government, rising slightly from £175.5
million
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 to £177.8
million
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. Local taxes
also
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 increased significantly from £91.2
million
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 in 2017 to £102.3
million
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 in 2018. Other sources
such
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 as grants saw a small rise from £38
million
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 to £38.5
million
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. Regarding spending, in 2017, 75
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percent
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per cent
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 of the
budget
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 went to salaries for officers and staff.
However
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,
this
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 dropped to 69
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2018.
In contrast
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, spending on technology increased from 8
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percent
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per cent
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 to 14
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percent
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per cent
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. The percentage allocated to
buldings
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buildings
 and transport remained the same at 17
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percent
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per cent
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 in both years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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