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Whether enacting the high taxes is the best way to encourage the economic growth

Whether enacting the high
taxes
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 is the best way to encourage
the
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apply
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economic
growth
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.
While
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became
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become
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the
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a
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 financial burden
in
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for
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 many businesses, it not merely
improve
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improves
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the
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public facilities, but
it
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also
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reduce
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reduces
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the
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discrimination within society.
This
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discuses
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discuss
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 why
has
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higher
taxes
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is
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are
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 more
advantage
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. One of the potential
reason
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reasons
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of
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for
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 higher
taxes
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 is
it
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they
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 play a main role in enhancing
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public services including
transports
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transport
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 and
logistic
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logistics
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 systems. With the influx of money from general
taxes
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,
government
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the government
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 run a higher risk of
invest
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investing
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 more in public facilities and
also
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 technology equipment,
this
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 adapts the global requirements
as well as
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interconnect
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interconnects
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 with global brands,
there
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thereby
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for ameliorate
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ameliorating
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country’s
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the country’s
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economic
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economy
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. Take
USA
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the USA
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 as an example,
in
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where high
taxes
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was
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 used
for contributing
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to contribute
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 a large of
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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 and it will later give back when they
became
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become
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a
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senior.
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authority
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the authority
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 increases the amount of
tax
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, the
economic
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economy
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 will sharply
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growth
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grow
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. What
make
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makes
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 more
taxes
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 particularly reasonable is the decrease of social injustice. Simply put, if the inequality tendency becomes more critical which was mostly caused by the
over control
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overcontrol
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 of large
company
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companies
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,
the
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unemployment will move in tandem, needless to say ,it absolutely negatively
effect
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affects
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to
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the
economy
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. So
that
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by
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adapting the higher
tax
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 for
upper
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the upper
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 class
cab
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can
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 be taken into
accounted
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account
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 as the best way to prevent
the
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social injustice,
guaranting
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guaranteeing
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economic
growth
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.
Hence
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 , there is no doubt that high
taxes
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is play
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a
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an
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 important role in the development of
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economy
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the economy
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.
In contrast
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, advocates of leading lower
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tax
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taxes
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 may argue that it would contribute
the
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to the
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 financial burden
in
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on
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business
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businesses
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 which can later
vulnerable
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be vulnerable
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 to their productivity and
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result
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results
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results in
results from
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the
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a
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 bad condition to
total
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the total
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economy
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.
However
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,
this
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 fear can be limited if
government
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the government
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 had a
tax
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 break with regard to their efficiency in
manufacture
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manufacturing
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. Ultimately, even
high
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though high
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taxes
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 can create financial
difficult
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difficulties
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 for
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the company
a company
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company
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companies
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, they still have opportunities for
having
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profits. In conclusion ,
while
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 higher
taxes
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 can be a financial tremendous;
however
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,
it is clear that
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 it not
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also
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only
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 flourishes the public facilities but
also
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 decreases the disparity which
both are
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is the
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 main reason for
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economy
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economic
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growth
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your main point in the introduction. Also, consider restating it in the conclusion for clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to help the reader follow your ideas better. Words like 'firstly', 'furthermore', and 'on the other hand' can be helpful.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar, especially subject-verb agreement and verb tenses. This will make your writing clearer.
task achievement
You have good points on how high taxes can support public services and reduce social injustice.
task achievement
Your examples, like the USA's infrastructure, help to illustrate your points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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